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 Writing.Com Item ID: #1070384
 Title:  Hello, Darkness
 Item Type: Static Item
 Brief:  Promt #1 for Poet's Practice Pad
 Last Modified: 02-12-2006 @ 4:32pm
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Hello, Darkness.
My old friend has
brought me here to
you, again. Night
of my soul claims
my daylight hours.
Not even moon
light enters now.

Hello, Darkness.
My old friend left
me here with you,
for only you will
reach inside, fill
my lonely hours.
Your emptiness,
all I have now.

Hello, Darkness.
My old friend knows
you will give me
answers to my
questions asked in
my pain filled hours.
I need to know.
Please, tell me. Now.

Hello, Darkness.
My old friend has
lied again. There
are no answers.
Inside this hollow
core pass the hours.
If breathing stops
is there peace, now?

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I wrote this in about half an hour. It's definitely a first draft and still needs work. I'm looking for comments that speak to the craft of poetry, not to the subject matter. (Comments on subject matter are okay, just not what I'm looking for.)